I Think I Saw You in my Dreams

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This is some song lyrics that I wrote. I'd like some opinions on it please. I am, by far, not an expert, but I do enjoy trying. I can handle criticism as well as praise, so please be honest. I don't expect it to be like the professionals but for an amateur, what do you think?
Usually, with song lyrics, I let them sit about a week and re-read them. I do that 3, sometimes 4, times, depending on how many changes are made, before I consider it finished.
This time I figured I'd do something different to see how that goes.


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CHORUS:

I think I saw you in my dreams.
And I’m wondering just what that means.
Oh, baby please give us a chance.
To be in love and make some romance.


I saw you standing by the door.
Just like so many times before.
Just as you started to walk away,
I had to go up to you to say
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Chorus
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Walking by beautiful, tall and lean
The most perfect woman that I’ve seen.
My mind and heart have already fell.
There’s something to you I need to tell.
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Chorus
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Music
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Darling I’m glad you are in my life.
I’m so happy that you are my wife.
The love between us you can really feel.
I think of the day that I revealed.
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Chorus
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One-time extra chorus after last regular chorus.
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I thought I saw you in my dreams.
Now I know just what that means.
Oh, baby thank you for the chance.
To be in love and make some romance.
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Oh, baby thank you for the chance.
To be in love and make some romance.


Photo: Pixabay - Artist: Geralt


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Howdy y’all. It’s me, ninong7 aka UJ aka John. Just a short intro about myself. I am a Texan that has retired in the Philippines. I moved to the Philippines with my wife back in May 2010. I am retired from the US Air Force. The music I like is mostly Classic Country and Classic Rock. I guess you could say that I am “Classic”. I play dominoes when I can find someone that will play, I play chess, cribbage, spades, hearts, Empire Builder, Rail Baron, Acquire and a few other games. I like to write poems and stories (although pretty novice) and I love learning about history, just about any history. I’m at home on my computer a lot but if I could afford to, I’d be traveling and documenting my travels to post in my blog. I hope to get to know a lot of you through PeakD and Discord.



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Well, i am not a perfect person to say.
But these are really amazing words.
Appreciated.

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Very good words really, continue like this and if you see that there is no support it does not matter. Always forward Juan 🙌🙌🙌

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