RE: Beyond Doubt: Whispers of the Unseen - Chapter 3
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So much is happening here!
The dream vision is riveting.
Interesting that after so many references to this sister, we get her name halfway through.
Right before she apparently fulfills the dream.
I never found anything other than her necklace.
Well, that gives me hope that she somehow survived - but if so, his vision was inaccurate.
Or incomplete...?
Exit sister, Enter, dragon...
Just one suggestion: keep verb tense consistent. Is the narrator using present tense, or past?
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I was struggling with that indeed, I started in past tense and then corrected it because now is more active and then "I sat" just felt much better and still does I don't know why, but I knew I was mixing them up at the same time. Sometimes the flow overrules what I know is correct, but I fixed it now
Yes, I thought it was more dramatic and unexpected that way, giving the name more impact. But I might be overthinking it.
Thank you for the great feedback!